My only criticism is that you could perhaps describe more the setting in which they're in. Doesn't have to be a perfect picture, but I was left not knowing how it is like where this takes place. Ofc I assume it's cold and snowy and such and such, but how does the reader know if, say, they have never ever heard about Scandinavia, the Vikings, the concept of a snowy place and being cold, a village, etc etc?
It helps a lot in immersing yourself in a story if you can get the vibes or make a mental picture of where you are.
Also, and maybe this is just your style and that's okay, but I would personally try to introduce these bits of language things like the Baltic sea word throughout the story rather than putting a list beforehand. You might have plans to change that in the future, in which case awesome bananas, but it does feel like "homework" of sorts that the reader Must do before reading your cool story.
Imo it can be done much differently, you can slip these little bits under the reader's nose without them even noticing, and explain them seamlessly by just hinting at their meaning (like replacing "My God" with its equivalent in places where this expression is expected, etc...), or by incorporating them into the story, so that if they talk about this they have to explain or suggest what it means and, at the same time, advance the plot.
Otherwise it's pretty good, I like it. Keep going!!
Leave suggestions on where the story should go, improvements I could make, or words of kindnes down here :)
I like it, lots of potential.
My only criticism is that you could perhaps describe more the setting in which they're in. Doesn't have to be a perfect picture, but I was left not knowing how it is like where this takes place. Ofc I assume it's cold and snowy and such and such, but how does the reader know if, say, they have never ever heard about Scandinavia, the Vikings, the concept of a snowy place and being cold, a village, etc etc?
It helps a lot in immersing yourself in a story if you can get the vibes or make a mental picture of where you are.
Also, and maybe this is just your style and that's okay, but I would personally try to introduce these bits of language things like the Baltic sea word throughout the story rather than putting a list beforehand. You might have plans to change that in the future, in which case awesome bananas, but it does feel like "homework" of sorts that the reader Must do before reading your cool story.
Imo it can be done much differently, you can slip these little bits under the reader's nose without them even noticing, and explain them seamlessly by just hinting at their meaning (like replacing "My God" with its equivalent in places where this expression is expected, etc...), or by incorporating them into the story, so that if they talk about this they have to explain or suggest what it means and, at the same time, advance the plot.
Otherwise it's pretty good, I like it. Keep going!!
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